Heroes of the exiled Kingdoms.

[Wilhelm Wastrow]

Wilhelm Wastrow was a simple lumberjack who became a mercenary warrior after seeing the entire village where he lived being attacked by thieves. Wilhelm was hired by the king to fight in the war, during the war Wilhelm ended up discovering that the king who hired him was the one who ordered the attack on the village where he lived. Returning to his homeland with a thirst for revenge, he learned that the king had died and could no longer have his revenge and this weighed on him like a chain, making him hate the nobility and the nobles and becoming more bitter every day. In the middle of his drunken nights and visits to brothels, Wilhem silently kept a secret: his heart belonged to a young noblewoman whose name he did not know. She had crossed his path countless times, being saved from imminent dangers by his skillful hands, although she always showed fear, without understanding his intentions. The years passed, and conflicts in her family led the young noblewoman to make a drastic decision. She abandoned her privileged life to pursue her own destiny as a knight. His first challenge was to recover his family's treasure, hidden in a long-forgotten tomb. Meanwhile Wilhelm received a magical letter that spoke of a distant family member and an inheritance, which lead him to his new quest.

This story has 7 protagonists and is based on exiled kingdoms, what do you think? Should I continue the story?

 

[VDX_360]

Fanfiction serves the motivation of the author. So if you want to continue with it, awesome!

But if you're asking for feedback on your overly burdened plot, excessive cliches, telenova level drama and lack of variation in sentence structure.... well....

Start new with 1 protagonist. Decide if he's supposed to be a hero or anti-hero.

You have his love interest, so make her that. You flush her out as more than a sex object but you need to flush her out a little more and maybe loose the she's-too-stupid-to-realized-he-keeps-saving-her-bit. That conflicts with her knightly ambition. She could also serve as a great foil for the protagonist's frustrated ability to have a future because he can't let go of the past. She could serve as a foil to his anger. She represents a nobility that is attempting to be noble. Maybe even if work in that he wants he because she's doing something with her goals, whereas he's falling into a PTSD/Depression self-medicated by getting drunk. But you need to figure out who to merge his drunken whoremongering with a character that means something.

Maybe have it as part of the character's past, but not part of the actual story. Drowning in grief rarely works as a protagonist (Inigo Montoya being a notable example). A misunderstood drunk works even less, unless you want the reader to dislike him.

The dead king could make an interested antagonist but you'll have to skillfully work in how memories of a dead person, or the political machine, really plays an active role in the character development.

So when it comes to writings, start small. Build from there.

And if you have to ask if you should continue a project, than don't do it.

Fanfiction is witting for yourself. Good, bad, or just masturbating delusions, its for you.

 

[VDX_360]

Another Great Question: Where does Chapter 1 Start?

Does the Reader meet the Protagonist as his village burns? If so, the story becomes
Tragedy (massacre) - Survival (mercenary) - Betrayal (learning the truth) - Defeat (Depression/loss of victory) - Hope (Love interest and letter).

Does the Reader meet the Protagonist as he gets the magical letter? If so, the story become:
Hope - Whatever Plot is Left.

The former has a failed hero's journey with heavy on the internal motivations. Very difficult to write, but could be quite good.

The latter is just the story of EK with some backstory that could seep in here and there.

 

[Wilhelm Wastrow]

The story is just an outline, I'm developing each character and their motivations, the young noblewoman is Grissenda I like the character and she's one of the seven protagonists but I can't speak exciting for her she's an NPC and well only the creator could speak better for her, in the same way as Adaon and Hige.
In Wilhelm's case, he saved a young noblewoman in the past, this speaks to her past, but not to the point of ending her past.
Hum, a outra personagem é uma Ladra, Who will travel alone for obvious reasons, the other is an atheist cleric who will have Adaon as a companion, and the last would be a wizard who will have Hige as a companion.
E assim a história vai se desenrolando e o último desafio seria basicamente com todos eles juntos, já temos um pré spoiler de como seria o final.
There are 97 stories, this will increase, but all within what Ek's universe has to offer.
Of course, it will only be published if the creator of EK authorizes and helps in the past of Adaon, Hige, and Grissenda.

I'm Brazilian, sorry for the horrible English.

Post automatically merged:    21/11/2023

começa o capítulo 1

It starts with the village being attacked, ends with a drunk sleeping on the road, chapter 2 starts with a seductive thief and ends with a drunk sleeping on the road